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https://youtu.be/7uUW6cfu__M
The feedback that I received from my previous elevator pitch was that I was moving too much and using my hands too much. I simply stopped doing that in this second attempt and only used my hands once or twice in the pitch. Some feedback that I got in the previous attempt was that I talked to fast and so this one I made sure that I had less to say and simply talked slower. All of the feedback was insightful and hopefully with this attempt I can learn how to perform an elevator pitch in the real world.
The feedback that I received from my previous elevator pitch was that I was moving too much and using my hands too much. I simply stopped doing that in this second attempt and only used my hands once or twice in the pitch. Some feedback that I got in the previous attempt was that I talked to fast and so this one I made sure that I had less to say and simply talked slower. All of the feedback was insightful and hopefully with this attempt I can learn how to perform an elevator pitch in the real world.
Hey Alex,
ReplyDeleteJust going off of your paragraph devoted to the feedback you received I can tell that your new elevator pitch would seem way more professionally done as the handling of the camera comes a long way with expressing the seriousness or validity of any video. It is also good that you slowed down and understood that less is more in this scenario as you don't want to look anxious or confuse your customers with details.
Hey Alex, I thought it was really helpful that you stopped moving so much as it makes your presence much more commanding and much less distracting from the ideas you were looking to convey. Movement can be necessary to create a sense of emotion, but it has to be subtle and infrequent, and I thought you did a good job with that in this most recent one, a definite improvement from your last pitch.
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