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The feedback that stood out the most was about how I needed more detail within my speech. I described what it was but that was it. I was told that I needed to go into more depth about certain aspects of the product which I then did this time.
Based on my feedback I added more detail to the product. I said that it was going to be more expensive than the decal but because it was replacing it and how it was going to save time which could be why its worth more. I also stated more about the app that was connected to the product which was something that needed to be clarified. The third time I think that I have thought more of my product so this time I believe that I was able to provide more information and do a better job of describing the product within the time frame.
The feedback that stood out the most was about how I needed more detail within my speech. I described what it was but that was it. I was told that I needed to go into more depth about certain aspects of the product which I then did this time.
Based on my feedback I added more detail to the product. I said that it was going to be more expensive than the decal but because it was replacing it and how it was going to save time which could be why its worth more. I also stated more about the app that was connected to the product which was something that needed to be clarified. The third time I think that I have thought more of my product so this time I believe that I was able to provide more information and do a better job of describing the product within the time frame.
Hey, Alex. This is really a fantastic idea. I have read a lot of blogs about parking fixes but your idea is unique and seems like a no-brainer. I really think you have a winner here. Your pitch was great. your voice was strong and the content was perfect. My only suggestion would be to raise the camera up so you are not looking down, but otherwise great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Alex, I thought this was a great idea, and the idea of a valet system here at UF, where parking spots take a long time to find would it make it so much easier on everyone's lives and it was something I wonder why no one else has ever thought of it. I like how you said that it would save you an hour, which really delivers how long it takes just to find a parking spot, it even takes that long after the normal hours, but the only thing that bug was the camera angle, but overall great job!
ReplyDeleteHey Alex!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your Elevator Pitch and think that you showed a lot of improvement from the last one, great job! You really did go into a lot more detail in this pitch than the last one. I think it was smart that you addressed the price difference and clarified why it was that much so people don’t think that they are overpaying.